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The diagram below shows the process of electricity production. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. IELTS Process/Diagram

The diagram below shows the process of electricity production. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. IELTS Process/Diagram
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The given diagram illustrates the process of producing
electricity
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.
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, it can be observed that the process starts with a combination of coal and oxygen which undergoes various steps including heating in order to produce gas and
steam
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 which is used to generate
electricity
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. The initial step focuses on preparing the raw materials.
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, coal will be poured into the massive kiln where oxygen is added for heating, the resulting byproducts include raw syngas and slag.
Next,
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the mixture moves to the removal stage, releasing CO2, Mercury and Sulphur. The purified syngas
as well as
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 slag are spinned in
gas
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a gas
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 turbine before being sent to
generator
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the generator
a generator
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 in order to produce
electricity
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 for wholesalers. The other step after spinning in the gas turbine. The hot exhaust gases
moves
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move
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 to a
fatory
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factory
 where
steam
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 is generated and discharge flue gases into the environment. After that,
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steam
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the steam
a steam
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 turbine will receive
steam
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 to
turning
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turn
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 and the
resulting
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result
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 is sent to
generator
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the generator
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. At
this
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 stage,
this
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 machine will transform into
electricity
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 for consumers.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, steam with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "moves" was used 2 times.
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