In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an ageing population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people. To what extent do the advantages of having an ageing population outweigh the disadvantages?

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People have longer lives than we used to have in multiple countries.

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, leading to a discussion about the

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comparison

between these two aspects. In my opinion, the elderly

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positive

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impact

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societies

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in two ways.

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the senior acquires precious life

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which is valuable to be passed down to the next generation. Not only for the knowledge but the history

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be taught by them. They have experienced the

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we don't have the chance to see in

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person

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, we can record them with

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modern technology to memorize the the passed events which

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meaningful to teach

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how we as

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get into the world and different cultures in countries around the world and

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ritual

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we have now.

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, the

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population

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serve as

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workforce. Despite the average longer lifespan for

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, the

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of workers

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declining. The factors of economic consideration and individualist

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becoming the mainstream trend among

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, fewer and fewer newborn babies in

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recent years, leading to the

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problem

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number of employees in the workplace.

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aging

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population

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could become the source of maintaining the source of the employment market.

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, there are increasing

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

329 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

ageing population
benefits
disadvantages
advantages
experience
knowledge
contribution
economy
society
healthcare
youth employment
community
intergenerational support
volunteerism
mentorship
increased demand
pension costs
social welfare systems
workforce
productivity
intergenerational conflict
technological adaptability
dependency
effective
skill development
employment opportunities
intergenerational solidarity
communication
lifelong learning
technological literacy
age-friendly
social policies
infrastructure

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