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This diagram gives information about the lifecycle of a butterfly, from the moments when it appeared till its adulthood.

This diagram gives information about the lifecycle of a butterfly, from the moments when it appeared till its adulthood.
The given scheme below illustrates a single butterfly`s lifecycle, beginning
from
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 the tiny egg and finishing
by
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with
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 the
adult
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 butterfly. We can evidently observe that insects are undergoing four stages of
this
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 process, which science calls metamorphosis.
First
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The first
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 part of
this
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 action is the egg which an
adult
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 female butterfly lays on the plant or
under
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apply
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ground,
it depends
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depending
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 on the type of nutrition. Because when
this
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 egg is ready, it will
transformate
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transform
to
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into
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 a caterpillar. It is
a
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the
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 next step of development. During
this
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 period the larva needs a lot of food around itself. It is a very interesting and diverse stage, during which young
larva
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larvae
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 change into
adult
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one
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ones
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, shedding their skin several times. When caterpillars finish their growth and nutrition
begins
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begin
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 a new phase of metamorphosis when the larva transforms into
pupa
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a pupa
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. It looks like a little cocoon on the branch or under the leaf.
This
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 stage can
last
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 more than one month. Outside it looks like nothing happens, but inside of
this
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 cocoon occurs significant changes which need a crucial energy.
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 of
this
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metamorphosis
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metamorphosis,
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 we can observe the appearance of
astonishing
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an astonishing
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 butterfly. When the
last
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 one
became
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becomes
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 an
adult
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 insect it will lay
the
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apply
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new eggs and
this
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 cycle
repeat
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repeats
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 again.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words adult with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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