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The bar graph below shows the amount of carbon emissions in different countries during three different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph below shows the amount of carbon emissions in different countries during three different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the bar chart provides key information about
percentage
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the percentage
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for
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of
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 humans
choos
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choose
 ways
for reducing
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to reduce
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 greenhouse gases in four major countries in 2005.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that
United
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the United
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 States
is
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was
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 the highest country in 1975
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to
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reduce greenhouse.
in
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addition
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addition,
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 all of
USA
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the USA
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 and
china
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China
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that
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had
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 have Highest percentage
reduced
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of reduced
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 greenhouse more than any country in 2005 .
According to
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 what is shown, Germany and
United
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the United
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 Kingdom
that get
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have
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lowest
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the lowest
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 percentages about 300.000 per
cent
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 for Germany and less than
moreover
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 the UK about 150.000 per
cent
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 which
so
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is so
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 low . in terms
of
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to
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United
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the United
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 States and
china
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China
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 On the percentage of global warming for
USA
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the USA
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 1.600.000 per
cent
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 and additional country china has 1.500.000 per
cent
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 which the second highest in
world
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the world
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 because Population density on everyone .

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduce" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon emissions
  • bar graph
  • trends
  • analyze
  • significant changes
  • emission levels
  • steady increase/decrease
  • comparisons
  • summarize
  • range
  • over time
  • environmental impact
  • greenhouse gases
  • sustainable practices
  • fossil fuels
  • industrial activity
  • data interpretation
  • chart analysis
  • megatons
  • climate change
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