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Overcrowded classrooms can hinder the teaching and learning process, affecting both teachers and students. Explore the causes of overcrowding in schools and propose practical solutions to manage classroom sizes and improve the quality of education

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Nowadays, educational facilities face many difficulties like overcrowding. It is a major
problem
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 in many
countries
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 around the world. There are
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several causes for
this
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problem
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 and the governments should solve
this
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problem
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 because it could
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affect
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on
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the study. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss some reasons
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 overcrowded
students
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 in classes and
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highlight
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 some solutions. 
To begin
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 with, populations increase annually. So the number of
students
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 dramatically in many
countries
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such
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 as Arabic
countries
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. Gathering many pupils in one
class
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cause
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 many problems.
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,
students
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 will not focus
at
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class
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 because there
are
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 a lot of noise.
Students
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 in the back can not hear the
teachers
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.
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, the tutors can not know the level of each
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students
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student
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 and can not control the
class
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.
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Also
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teachers
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 can achieve their plan very well because half of the time
spending
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is spent
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 on
manage
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 the
class
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.
I
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 addition, the
students
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 will hate the school because it will be very boring and noisy. They can not earn new skills and develop their
weekness
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weakness
weaknesses
.
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, it could affect
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the
heath
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health
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 of the children. The diseases will
convey
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be conveyed
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 quickly
between
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among
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 the
students
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such
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,
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 fever.
On the other hand
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, society and government should deal with
this
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problem
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 seriously. The education major should
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 first because
new
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the new
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 generation
are
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 the future of any country. There are several solutions for overcoming classes.
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, governments should plan for each school.
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,
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some
students
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 study in the morning and some of them go to school in the evening.
Secondly
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, society and companies should help
country
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 to build new schools
especially
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, especially
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 in
countries
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 that face poverty.
Thirdly
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, add many
teachers
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 to
mange
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manage
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 the classes because they will feel tired.  In conclusion, overcrowded is a dangerous issue. It
affect
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affects
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on
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learners and tutors. It
effect
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affects
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on
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the level of
students
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. They will not focus
with
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 the lessons. The
teachers
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 will face difficulties in
manage
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managing
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 the
class
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. The education process will become very boring and not effective.

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task achievement
Ensure the introduction presents a clear thesis statement that outlines the main points you will discuss in the essay. This gives a roadmap for the reader.
coherence and cohesion
Focus on improving the logical flow between paragraphs. Using linking words can help guide the reader through your arguments more clearly.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to back up your points. This will enhance the clarity and depth of your arguments, making your essay more persuasive.
coherence and cohesion
Revise the essay for grammatical accuracy, especially for subject-verb agreement and word choice, to improve overall clarity and professionalism.
task achievement
You demonstrated a good understanding of the topic and addressed both causes and solutions to overcrowding in classrooms.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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