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Some people believe that artificial intelligence (AI) has become an essential part of daily life and its usage should be encouraged, while others argue that relying too much on AI could have negative consequences. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The importance of the interference of artificial intelligence in the lives of
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 at an unprecedented pace, which was always debatable, has now become more controversial with many
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 claiming that it is beneficial,
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 others reject the notion. In my opinion, increasingly relying on it, will make life problematic, ergo, only limited usage of
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 innovations acts as
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. After analyzing the statement and moving
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, the first and foremost reason behind the high dependency on AI is that it makes the life of
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individuals easier by providing instant services
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 to look for teachers to get appropriate knowledge
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,
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not need to wait for a long time to come in contact with the customer service representative, the introduction of ai into
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 sectors, not only saves time but
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 caters helping hands in a convenient way. Another striking benefit in
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 regard is that
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 can broaden the confines of
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 even situated
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 their homes, getting tremendous information about the recent happenings worldwide. Moving
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, the main reason that cannot be ignored is that it plays a crucial role in introducing
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 to the modern- era, providing in-depth learning to operate
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 gadgets, and
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 assisting scientists in complex discoveries.
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, proving ahead with the main underlying reasons stems from the fact that the constant involvement of
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 in a curriculum of the students, involves,
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the teachers
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, leading to a depersonalization of communication, which encourages anonymity and disinhibition makes children disrespectful and isolated. Discussing
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, it is pertinent to mention that its incessant presence in the workplaces, customer-care sectors, and
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schools, reducing the necessity of skilled workers, representatives, and mentors, contributes
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 in youngsters, which ultimately creates discouragement in them. Apart from the reasons mentioned above, many are in favour of uplifting the
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, after analysing the aforementioned arguments, one can reach the conclusion that
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 the benefits of artificial intelligence are indeed too great to negate.
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, the adoption of a judicious strategy is utmost inducible to escape from its detrimental impacts on the socio-economic life of the public.

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task achievement
Strengthen your thesis statement to clearly indicate your main position on the topic. Instead of saying 'in my opinion,' try formulating a more definitive statement about your stance towards AI.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your main points are well organized and connected with clear transitions. This will help the reader follow your argument more easily.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your claims about the negative consequences of AI, which will enhance your argument and demonstrate a deeper understanding of the complexities of the issue.
content
You have rightly identified various benefits and drawbacks of AI, showcasing your ability to engage with different perspectives on the topic.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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