Nowadays many students have the opportunity to study for part or all of their courses in foreign countries. While studying abroad brings many benefits to individual students, it also has a number of disadvantages. Do you agree or disagree?

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contemporary
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era, going abroad for education is seen as
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. Foreign countries provide numerous opportunities
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pupils to study their part and all of their courses. It comes with many advantages and disadvantages. I do not support
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with, the first
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for disagreement is that it helps
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to
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independent. To be precise, when teenagers move to another territory to get
education
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an education
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, they tend to pay their
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tuition
fees themselves. They
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live separately from their parents and pay rent as well. It helps them to
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responsible for themselves.
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reason
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is socializing.
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, in
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country to person meets new communities and
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chance
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to meet new
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. It helps them to be able to socialize more which leads to help more in future.
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reason
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is
in improving
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communication
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skills. To illustrate, when students move to
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a foreign
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country, they get to talk to new
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which helps in improving
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skills. It is
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necessary
to have a good
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skill because it is needed in every job field.
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reason
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is that it
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people
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in learning
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language. To
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explain
more, when anybody wants to go to
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place they
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to learn their language.
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, the only disadvantage I see is that they get
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from families which leads to feeling
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loneliness
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kind of thing can make
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feel depressed and be bad for
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.
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, there are more benefits
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communication
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skill
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, new language learning and socializing. There are some disadvantages but it will be more beneficial for young
people
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as they can be independent.

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structural
Ensure that your argument is clearly presented in the introduction. It would help to rephrase the statement you disagree with for clarity.
content
Develop your ideas further, providing more detailed examples to support your claims, especially regarding the advantages of studying abroad.
language
Make sure to proofread your work to correct spelling errors such as 'tution' (tuition) and 'lonliness' (loneliness).
style
Use more varied sentence structures to improve the flow of your writing and make it more engaging.
content
You have identified multiple advantages of studying abroad, which shows thoughtful consideration of the topic.
structural
Your conclusion effectively summarizes your main points, reinforcing your overall message.

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