Some people believe that advertising has a strong effect on a person’s decision-making process. Others feel that it has little or no real impact. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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There is no denying the fact that countries

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It is a commonly held belief that Small countries are more economical in terms of money. there is

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an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that I like living in big cities because it is more fun and luxurious.

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coherence and cohesion

Ensure that your introduction clearly outlines both sides of the argument and leads to your own opinion in a cohesive manner.

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Provide more substantial points and examples to support your argument, ensuring they are relevant to the impact of advertising on decision-making.

coherence and cohesion

Work on the structure of your essay to improve the flow. Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea and that ideas connect smoothly to one another.

coherence and cohesion

Conclude your essay with a summary of your discussion and a clear statement of your opinion.

task achievement

The introductory statement presents a clear acknowledgment of different viewpoints.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

61 words

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