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The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks fo the building industry.

The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks fo the building industry.
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The provided graph gives information about the amount of average monthly
salary
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 over a twenty-
year
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 period between 1953 and 1973,
as well as
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 the
number of
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apply
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prices of black and white
television
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 and
colored
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coloured
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television
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 in the same time period.
Overall
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, it is obviously seen that
the
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in the
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 analyzed period the
avarege
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average
 monthly
salary
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 of Japanese was
upward
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an upward
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 trend,
whereas
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 the black and white
television
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 and
colored
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coloured
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television
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 indicators observed downward trends. Getting back to the
detials
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details
 beginning of the
year
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 the
indicator
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 of
avarege
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average
 monthly
salary
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 constituted at 20,
then
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 increased slightly in
middle
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the middle
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 of the
year
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 and was
grow
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growing
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 up sharply end of the yeas made up at 200,
however
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 black and white
television
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 and
colored
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coloured
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television
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 indicators
were considerably decrease
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considerably decreased
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. Beginning of the
year
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 the
indicator
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of
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for
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 black and white
television
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 was 100
then
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 dropped gradually end of the
year
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made
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making
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 up approximately 20, which was the same
indicator
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 as the
aveage
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average
 monthly
salary
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 in 1953. In 1958 the colored
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television
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televisions
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 was 180, which
as
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was
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 the highest
indicator
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 during the analyzed
year
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,
then
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 decreased
until
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to
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 100 end of the
year
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.The diagram illustrates the process
that is
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 used to manufacture bricks
fo
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for
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 the building industry.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words salary, television, year, indicator with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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