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Some people believe that it is good for students to have the same teacher for several years. Others think students benefit more from having new teachers each year. Which do you think is better? Give specific reasons to support your opinion.

Many think that it is beneficial for
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 the same
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 for a long period
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 others think the opposite. I believe that having new
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 annually is more useful for
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 because they have different
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 of perspectives and
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,
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students
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 can learn more effectively from new
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.
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 with, changing scholars can provide some facilities
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 as new
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 and perspectives.
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 is because new
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 often bring innovative ideas and dynamics to the classroom which can encourage social growth in
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.
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, at Haifa University one research demonstrates that people who often change their scholars,
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directly
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 their certain skills
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 as creativity and productivity.
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, having the same
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 for multiple years could lead to complacency, as the
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 may get too comfortable with a student’s abilities and needs. It can
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 lead to biases whether conscious or unconscious that affect the way the
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 interacts with the student.
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, in 1990s China,
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 could not change their
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 regularly and,
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 decreased their
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all over the world. In conclusion,
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 having the same
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 for several years might foster a strong bond and stability, the advantages of having a variety of
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exposure
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 to different teaching styles, broader knowledge, development of adaptability, and a more diverse social experience make it a better option for most
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coherence and cohesion
The introduction could be more clearly structured by directly stating your thesis at the end of the opening sentence. Additionally, some phrasing could be refined for clarity (e.g., 'different kind of perspectives' should be 'different kinds of perspectives').
coherence and cohesion
Consider enhancing the connection between your ideas to improve the logical flow. Use more linking words and phrases to guide the reader through your arguments (e.g., 'Firstly', 'Additionally', 'Conversely').
task achievement
Provide more specific examples or research directly related to your points to strengthen your argument. The reference to 'a research demonstrates' would benefit from more context about the study.
task achievement
In the second body paragraph, stating specific examples or statistics related to the impact of having the same teacher for multiple years would significantly enrich your argument and enhance clarity.
task achievement
Your essay presents a clear opinion on the topic, which is well maintained throughout your arguments.
coherence and cohesion
The conclusion strongly summarizes your main points and reiterates your position effectively.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • benefit
  • persistent relationship
  • academic performance
  • support
  • guidance
  • familiarity
  • strengths and weaknesses
  • personalized feedback
  • expose
  • diverse
  • perspective
  • subject matter expertise
  • enriching
  • resourcefulness
  • innovative practices
  • curriculum
  • monotony
  • stagnation
  • mitigate
  • favoritism
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