IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

1-The graph below shows the pollution levels in London between 1600 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

1-The graph below shows the pollution levels in London between 1600 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The line graph illustrates the changing levels of
pollution
Use synonyms
due to
Linking Words
smoke
Use synonyms
 and
sulphur
Use synonyms
dioxide
Use synonyms
 in London between the years 1600 to 2000. From the data provided in the graph, we can see that the trends experienced over time by both
smoke
Use synonyms
 and
sulphur
Use synonyms
dioxide
Use synonyms
 are very similar.
Overall
Linking Words
, both pollutants rise and fall in the same years. Beginning in the
year
Use synonyms
 1600, the
pollution
Use synonyms
 caused by
smoke
Use synonyms
 and
sulphur
Use synonyms
dioxide
Use synonyms
 was negligible after which it began to rise. Up to around the
year
Use synonyms
 1720,
sulphur
Use synonyms
dioxide
Use synonyms
 found in the atmosphere had risen drastically, from 50
micrograms
Use synonyms
 before 1600 to over 750
micrograms
Use synonyms
 in 1720.
Similarly
Linking Words
,
smoke
Use synonyms
also
Linking Words
 increased somewhat, from just under 50
micrograms
Use synonyms
 to around 240
micrograms
Use synonyms
 in 1720.
After
Linking Words
this
Linking Words
, the magnitude of
pollution
Use synonyms
 continued to increase for the most part, up until 1880. The
pollution
Use synonyms
 caused
due to
Linking Words
sulphur
Use synonyms
dioxide
Use synonyms
 reached the maximum in the
year
Use synonyms
 1850 (approximately 900
micrograms
Use synonyms
 per cubic metre)
while
Linking Words
 the highest amount of
pollution
Use synonyms
 caused by
smoke
Use synonyms
 was around the
year
Use synonyms
 1900 (approximately 500
micrograms
Use synonyms
 per cubic metre). It was only after 1900 that the levels of
pollution
Use synonyms
 started decreasing and reached nearly 0 by the
year
Use synonyms
 2000.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to".
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words pollution, smoke, sulphur, dioxide, year, micrograms with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: