Topic: Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small numbers of people. Some people say that governments should spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe that would be a waste of money. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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to speak or adopt the
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to leave the
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people
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. Many believe that it is important for
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to invest some
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minority
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language
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languages
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,
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other
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support
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not worth
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the money on
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this endangered language
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and it should be invested
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public services like health and transportation.
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essay will discuss both
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and demerits of preserving
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at extinction. To start with, there are many reasons why
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is protected by
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the government
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through public
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. Because ,
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the
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is the only or first medium which is widely used by
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around the world to reflect individual's identity. Leaving behind
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these languages
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language
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will not only
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identity , but
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traditions and cultural things attached to
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will
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suffers
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.
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, it
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represents
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's history which provides information to young
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about that particular community. youngsters used to speak the languages which are famous and have little information about
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ancestral
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language
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languages
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. So , it is important to save
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these languages
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language
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. On the other side, apart from investing public
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to raise the standard of
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which is spoken by
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minorities
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. It is important to devote the public money to other sectors like transportation and health which are more crucial . If the capital is provided to
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sector and transportation it will not
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people
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's
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but
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develops
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the
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wellbeing
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because of easy
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accessibility
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,
due to
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impact
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the impact
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of
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globalization,
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people
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began to speak and learn the
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spoken
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in order to
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communicate and
to
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build public
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connections
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all over the world .
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, many thought
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is
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it
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is better to have public
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on public. In conclusion, it is
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true to preserve the local
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because it will
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attract the
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from different areas to learn about the culture which will boost
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tourism
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,
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there are many serious issues which are treated first to make
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people
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life
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easier

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Try to improve the thesis statement in your introduction to clearly indicate your position on the topic. It's important for the reader to understand where you stand after reading the introduction.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph clearly supports the main idea and that there is a smooth transition between them. This will enhance clarity and flow in your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Work on grammar and vocabulary to avoid mistakes that can distract the reader. Simple errors in spelling and phrasing can affect your overall score.
task achievement
The essay explores both sides of the argument, showing a balanced perspective on the issue.
task achievement
The discussion of cultural identity and the impact of globalization adds depth to your argument.

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Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

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  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
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  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • endangered languages
  • cultural heritage
  • identity
  • community cohesion
  • social interaction
  • economic implications
  • investment
  • tourism
  • cultural industries
  • funding
  • resources
  • globalization
  • minority languages
  • intervening
  • cultural diversity
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