The graph below shows the average monthly salary and the prices of black and white and colour TV in Japanese yen from 1953 to 1973.

The graph below shows the average monthly salary and the prices of black and white and colour TV in Japanese yen from 1953 to 1973.
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The line chart illustrates the mean of the monthly salary, the value of the black and white
TV
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and
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TV
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over the period of 20 years from 1953 to 1973. The units are measured in yens.
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, it is evident from the chart that, the amount of monthly salary experienced a gradual increase throughout the period,
while
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both black and white, and
colored
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coloured
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TV
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witnessed a significant fall.
According to
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the line chart,
it is clear that
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, in 1953, the monthly salary was not anywhere near as much as
colored
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coloured
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and black and white TVs.
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However
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it experienced a considerable rise
untill
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until
1963
where
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when
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it surpassed the
price
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of black and white
TV
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.
Then
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the improvement
contioued untill
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continued until
1973 reaching 180
yen
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where
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whereas
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to
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apply
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the level
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of color
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color
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colour
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TV
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was 15 years ago, before surpassing the
colored
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coloured
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TV
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price
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in 1968, at 100
yen
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. In
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contrast
, in 1953, the
price
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of a black and white
TV
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was 100
yen
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. Anyhow, the
price
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of that class saw a
considarable
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considerable
decline until 1968, before experiencing a slight fall to just under 40
yen
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at
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in
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1973.
Similiarly
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Similarly
,
colored
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coloured
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TV
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was at 180
yen
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in 1958,
thereafter
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it witnessed a dramatic decline to 110
yen
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within 5 years.
Then
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it
further
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dropped to 90
yen
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in 1973.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words tv, price, yen with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Average monthly salary
  • Black and white TV
  • Colour TV
  • Japanese Yen
  • Affordability
  • Upward/downward trend
  • Technological advancements
  • Consumer preferences
  • Price dynamics
  • Market changes
  • Increase/decrease
  • Ratio
  • Introduction
  • Compare/contrast
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