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The maps illustrate changes happening in the city of Bates in 1950 and now. Summarize the given information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The maps illustrate changes happening in the city of Bates in 1950 and now. Summarize the given information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The given map demonstrates information about changes in the
city
Use synonyms
 from 1950 to now.
Overall
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, it can be
notably
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notable
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seen
Verb problem
apply
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that
population
Correct article usage
the population
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 of the
city
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 was 20.000 in 1950,
while
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 now
this
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 figure
have
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has
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 radically increased to 200.000.
According to
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 the map in 1950,
Business
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the Business
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 district
situated
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was situated
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on
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in
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 the centre of the
city
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 and
halfly
Correct your spelling
half
 surrounded by
Residental
Correct article usage
the Residental
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 area.
Major
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The major
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 road was only
on
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in
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 the
city
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center
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centre
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, whilst there was
small
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a small
the small
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bridge
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 on the river. Near the
bridge
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,
tiny
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a tiny
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residental
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residential
 area
erected
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was erected
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 and
Airport
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the Airport
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 was extremely small. In terms of today's view of the
city
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, artificial
lake
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lakes
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 have been constructed on the river.
While
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old
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the old
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bridge
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 has been extended,
new
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a new
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 one
have
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has
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 been added to another part of the lake. On the other side of the
bridge
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,
business
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a business
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 district has been constructed,
also
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Residdental
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residential
are
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area
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 have been
enermously
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enormously
 extended. Major
road
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roads
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has
Correct subject-verb agreement
have
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 been increased in order to develop
availability
Correct article usage
the availability
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 of the
city
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, bridge with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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