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In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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Population
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The population
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 of
few
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a few
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 nations of the world think that buying a property to live
is
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in is
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 way better than leasing it
for
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apply
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part time
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part-time
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.They have
reliable
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 reason for their decision.The factors will be explained and illustrated with a factual reason. Nowadays,People choose to purchase a building to live there in calm and chill vibes
due to
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 being safe
in
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 any possible dangers.
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However
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 it could be demanding a lot of funds but in the
end
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 they are happy with it.
In
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change
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since
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in
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past
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the past
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 centuries.To demonstrate it,Buying a house is not only
good
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a good
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 option
to
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for
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 being satisfied
at
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with
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 life but
also
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it
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apply
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considered
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is considered
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 as some kind of investment which people usually tend to do
it
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apply
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.
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, In Dubai,
Foreigns
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foreigners
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 are buying
the
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apply
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properties more than
local
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locals
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 because of
its
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their
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 value in the future.
Secondly
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,Owning has some effects on renting the property either,
specially
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especially
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 on the prices of the houses,If
properties sale
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property sales
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 get higher, the rate of renting will increase instantly.
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,In
Iran
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Iran,
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 investors are making
a
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apply
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purchase
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purchases
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everyday
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every day
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 and
this
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 attitude
influence
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influences
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on
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apply
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the people who are not able to lease it,In the
end
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end,
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 the investors are
kinda
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kind
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 ruling the markets.
Overall
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,Owning a house is not always positive,It has
their
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its
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 negativity
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in
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 every
situations
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situation
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.
in
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 my opinion
government
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the government
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 should take control of the markets and help the poorer side of
population
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the population
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 who
cant
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can't
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 afford either
buying
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buy
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 or
renting
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rent
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 a house for their good life.

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task achievement
Try to provide a clearer introduction stating your main points and thesis statement. It's important to outline your argument clearly at the beginning.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to include more varied linking words and phrases to enhance the flow of your essay. This will improve the reader's understanding of the relationships between your ideas.
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Expand on your examples with more details or explanations to enhance clarity and relevance. This can strengthen your arguments and make them more convincing.
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You have included relevant examples, such as the situation in Dubai and Iran, which help illustrate your points.
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Your essay addresses the topic, reflecting an understanding of why home ownership is valued.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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