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The graph below gives information about the number of tourists who visited five different countries between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the number of tourists who visited five different countries between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph shows International Tourists Arrival in five countries worldwide from 1995 to 2010, each 5-year
period
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 all countries increased in all periods, except the USA, which decreased moderately in the
last
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period
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. Still,
America
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 was the highest in all periods. In 1995, exactly 70
million
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people
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 went to
America
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 and it reached its peak in 2005, when more than 90
million
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 arrived in
America
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. From 2005 to 2010,
America
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's arrival decreased moderately to between 80 and 90
million
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. French experienced a significant increase. At the start
period
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, only 30
million
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people
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 departed for France and in the
last
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period
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, the number of
people
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 was the same as the
America
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's visitors. An Asian country was the third. It rose significantly, from around 20
million
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 in 1995 to over 40
million
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 in 2010. In 1995, Brazil was higher than Egypt, even though the amount of
people
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 was nearly the same, below 10
million
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. Egypt surpassed Brazil between 1995 and 2000. Since
then
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, both of them have constantly increased to between 15 and 20
million
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, america, million, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moderately" was used 2 times.
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