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The graph shows the number of tourists visiting the Galapagos Islands between 2015 and 2022. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. To zoom in, click on the image.

The graph shows the number of tourists visiting the Galapagos Islands between 2015 and 2022. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. To zoom in, click on the image.
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The line graph illustrates the number of
visitors
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 to the Galapagos Islands between 2015 and 2022, categorizing them into those who stayed on
islands
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the islands
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 and those who stayed on luxury cruise ships.
Overall
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, the total number of tourists increased significantly over
the
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that period, reaching a peak of over three
million
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 in 2022.
While
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visitors
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 staying on islands experienced steady growth, cruise ship
visitors
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 showed fluctuations before stabilizing at a similar level in the final year.
To begin
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 with, the number of island
visitors
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 fluctuated between 600,000 and 800,000 from 2015 to 2017.
However
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, after 2017,
this
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 category saw a substantial upward trend, reaching two
million
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 by 2022.
In contrast
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, cruise ship
visitors
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 plateaued at around 400,000 in 2015 before rising sharply to 800,000 in 2018. After stabilizing at
this
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 level until 2020, their numbers plummeted in 2021, only to recover and reach two
million
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 in 2022. In conclusion,
while
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 island
visitors
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 dominated in the early years, both categories reached an equal peak of two
million
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 by the end of the period.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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