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The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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The three charts
depicts
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 the Trade in Australia with three countries between 2004 and 2009.
Overall
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, the imports in
Japan
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 and
United
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the United
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states
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States
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 are seen
having
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a level off with very little fluctuations,
where as
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whereas
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 in
China
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 a significant
raise
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rise
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 can be seen. Export in
United
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the United
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states
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 looks stable with a small oscillation,
while
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 in
China
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 there is
a
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gradual growth. Export in
Japan
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 shows a significant fluctuation throughout the period. The Imports in
Japan
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is
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 stable till the
year
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 2007 with 20
Billion
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 and fluctuated in the next two
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year
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years
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 reaching the same level in 2009.
Similarly
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,
United
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the United
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States
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 shows a gradual
rise
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 and fall till 2009, having a little more
that
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than
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 20
Billion
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 by the end of the period.
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However
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However,
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 in
China
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, there is a surge in
the
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apply
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imports, reaching 30
Billion
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 in the
year
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 2008 and thereby remaining stable. Looking at the exports, all three countries
shows
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 a significant
rise
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 with
United
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the United
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States
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 having the least
rise
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 and
China
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have
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 the most
rise
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 United
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states
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States
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 started with 10
Billion
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 in 2004, raised gradually till 2008 and had a small fall in 2009:
China
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 had a comparable
rise
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 in exports starting above 10
Billion
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 in 2004, reached 20
Billion
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 in 2007 thereby having a significant growth.
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hand
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Japan
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 had a surge between the
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year
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years
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 2004 and 2005 and
also
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 in the
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year
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years
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 2007 to 2008. A significant fall can be seen in the case of
Japan
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 in the
year
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 2009 reaching almost 30
Billion
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, states, china, year, billion, rise with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "surge" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 5 times.
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