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The government is spending a lot of of money to discover life on other planets. Some people think that government is wasting money and should spend more money addressing the problems of public.To what extent do you agree?

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The possibility of intelligent
life
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 on other planets has intrigued governments
from
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 decades.
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this
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 curiosity , the governments are spending a significant amount of money to discover
lifes
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life
lives
 on other planets.Some
people
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 think that
these spendings
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are
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is
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 necessary to bring revolution in technologies and medical sciences.
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, others contend that it is
waste
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a waste
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 of
tax payer
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taxpayer
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 money and it should be allocated to resolve public problems.I personally believe, scientific
discoveries
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 as necessary
as
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for
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 public
well -being
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well-being
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, so
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the
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government should adopt a balanced tactic. Proponents argue that reaching out to aliens could greatly expand human knowledge.It could help us to understand the advancement of technologies and science which may lead to human benefits.
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,If researchers are connected to
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advanced civilizations , they can share their technologies , space travel and medical science which could
revalutionize
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revolutionize
 human progress.
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, contacting extraterrestrial beings might answer the fundamental questions of the origins of
life
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 and the universe, leading to reshaping our understanding of human existence.
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although
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 scientific inventions and
discoveries
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 make
life
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 more
convient
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convenient
through innovation,neglecting
the
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public issues and
priortizing
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prioritizing
 universal
discoveries
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 is not a prudent approach.The government should always give
prefrence
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preference
 to
people
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 as they are generating funds for them in the form of taxes.
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 investing money
on
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 inventions and
discoveries
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 does not make any sense if
people
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 are struggling to afford basic needs
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 as food , education and jobs.
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 ,
an
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 idea of universal exploration should be abandoned if
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people
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the people
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 of a nation
living
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low
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a low
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 standard of
life
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. In conclusion, no doubt
discoveries
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 play a crucial role in
the
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human development .Connecting with aliens is
fascinating
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a fascinating
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 thing to do , but
such
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excitment
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excitement
should not come at
expense
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the expense
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 of
basic
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the basic
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 development of the public.A prudent approach, where
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the
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lifestyle of
people
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 is
priortised
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prioritised
 and have enough funds for space exploration only
then
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 it is the best surplus thing to do .

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your ideas are presented in a clearer order. Each paragraph should logically flow into the next, making it easier for the reader to follow your argument.
task achievement
Make your conclusion stronger by summarizing the key points discussed in the essay more clearly. This will help reinforce your main argument for the reader.
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You provide a good balance between the arguments for space exploration and those for addressing public issues, showing your awareness of multiple perspectives.
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Your use of examples, such as the potential benefits of technology from advanced civilizations, adds depth to your argument.
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