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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodations in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodations in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar graph depicts the number of
families
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 residing in
own
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their own
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 houses
as well as
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 in rented properties over the
years
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 starting from 1918 till 2011
at
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in
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 two different nations namely England and Wales.  It is very clear from the graph that in 1918, a majority of individuals resided in rental properties. More than 70
percentage
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per cent
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 of
families
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 were renting at that time. Moving forward to the
years
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 1939 and 1953, an equal proportion of
families
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 sought renting .
Similarly
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, in the
years
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 1999 and 2001, only a little more than 30% of households
housed
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were housed
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 in rental houses, which is the least throughout these
years
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. 
On the other hand
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, a few amount off
families
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 owned a house in the
year
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 1918.
This
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 trend increased to almost 70
percentage
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per cent
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 of
families
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 with own property in the
year
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 2001. It is
further
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 demonstrated a small decline in the
year
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 2011. Another notable data is that in the
year
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 1971,
a
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apply
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50
percentage
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per cent
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 of people occupied
in
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apply
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rental and
own
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owned
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household
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households
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words families, years, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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