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Band 3.5

You recently visited a foreign country and gost some information at the Tourist Information Centre. The information given to you was wrong. Write a letter to the centre manager and explain: what was the information required how was the wrong information provided? what problem did you have because of this?

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Dear sir, I am writing to express my concerns regarding the service of your information office. I am new to
this
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 country that's why I am not
awared
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aware
 of
any thing
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anything
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 like transportation and health services in
this
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 town . So,
i
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I
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 came to your resource
center
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centre
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 to
know
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learn
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 more about the area, but the crew guided me wrong which
leads
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led
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 to
have
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apply
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severe complications. At that
time
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,
i
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I
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 urgently
wants
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wanted
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 to commute to other cities in search of
job
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a job
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 and decided to take
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bus
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the bus
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 .
However
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, one person who is
also
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 my
room mate
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roommate
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 referred me to your office. When I asked your staff
few
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a few
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question
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 they were not ready to help me as they
are
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were
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assuming
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asking
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 me to pay more money . After some
time
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 , when
i
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I
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 requested your team to provide
a knowledge
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knowledge
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 about boarding a
bus
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then
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 he told me about the train routes. Because of having false information, I suffered a lot in finding a
bus
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 . I came to know after 1 hour that it is station of train where we can't ride a
bus
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 as if you want to have
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bus
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a bus
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 , you have to walk 30 minutes more. I was really disappointed at that
time
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, that only because of money your employee
disguided
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disguised
misguided
 me and
i
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I
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aslo
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also
 missed the
last
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bus
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 .
This
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 results in
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a wastage
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wastage
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 of
time
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 . I would like to draw attention that your team should ensure to help everybody who has paid
thier
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their
 consultation fee. I would be grateful if you could respond at your earliest convenience.
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Yours
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Your
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 faithfully,

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coherence and cohesion
Enhance the clarity and structure of your paragraphs. Begin each paragraph with a clear topic sentence that summarizes its content.
task achievement
Ensure that your letter maintains a formal tone throughout. Avoid using informal phrases (e.g., 'I am new to this country' could be rephrased to 'As a newcomer to this country').
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to proofread your letter for grammatical errors and typos. For example, 'gost' should be 'got', 'awared' should be 'aware', and 'disguided' should be 'misguided'. Proper spelling and grammar enhance readability.
task achievement
The letter addresses the main points required in the task prompt: what information was needed, how the wrong information was given, and the resulting problem.
task achievement
You effectively communicated your disappointment with the service, which reflects your personal experience and enhances the emotional appeal of the letter.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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