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The graph below shows the changes in weekly food consumption per person in Great Britain from 1985 to 2010. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graph below shows the changes in weekly food consumption per person in Great Britain from 1985 to 2010. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The
linegraph
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line graph
 shows the average
food
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 that an individual eats per
week
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 in England between 1985 to 2010.
Its
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 clear that
their
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there
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 is a decline in the use of salty
food
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 during
this
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 time
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 a slight increase in the consumption of meat. Fish fluctuated at first before a rise in usage was noted. Meaty
food
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 started at a very low of 100g per
week
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 in 1985 and increased by
a
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100% to 200g per
week
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 by 2010.
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 the use of salt in
food
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 reduced over 25 years with 300 grams ending at its lowest point of 200g weekly. The consumption of fish started at a very high of 600g and rose to 700g before
returing
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returning
 to 600g in 5 years.
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However
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 it started making a sharp incline
form
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from
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 1995 until 2010 reaching a highest of 850 grams per
week
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 per individual in Great
Britian
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Britain
.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, week, g with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • weekly food consumption
  • per person
  • Great Britain
  • categories
  • trend
  • significant
  • increases
  • decreases
  • patterns
  • analysis
  • fruit and vegetables
  • meat and dairy
  • bread and cereals
  • comparison
  • consumption rates
  • health awareness
  • dietary changes
  • economic factors
  • implications
  • public health
  • nutrition policies
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