The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph illustrates the change in electrical goods by ownership and
show
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the comparison of time spent doing housework in households in a particular country from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
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, the line graph depicts
rapidly
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a rapidly
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increasing
percentage
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of households with electrical appliances including washing
machine
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machines
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,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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and
vaccum
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vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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.
While
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the number of
hours
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of housework per week and per household quickly decreased.
To begin
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with
percent
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per cent
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of
household
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households
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in 1920, the rate of refrigerators was 0 and
this
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appliance more quickly
rocket
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rocketed
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and in 1940 was 55. From 1940 to 1980 the
percentage
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of
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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was 100 and until 2019
save
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apply
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this
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trend. In the
beginning
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beginning,
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the
percent
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percentage
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of washing
machine
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machines
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was 40 and
his
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its
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percentage
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swiftly improved by 1960 and by 1980 a little decreased. From 1980 to 2019 the
percentage
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of washing machine becomes gradually increased. The proportion of vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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in 1920 was 30 and by 1980 steadily boosted and was already 100 percent. From 2000 to 2019 the trend has not changed. The next is
number
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a number
the number
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of
hours
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of housework per week, per household. In 1920 number of
hours
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per week was 50
hours
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and quickly diminished by 1960. From 1960 to 2019 amount of time
become
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apply
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slowly
come
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came
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down and it was approximately 10
hours
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by 1920.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, hours with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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