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Your local bookshop has invited members of the public to recommend a guest speaker for an upcoming event that will include a series of talks from well-known people. Write an e-mail to the bookshop. In your e-mail: • suggest a speaker • say what they would contribute to the event • explain why other people would be interested too You do NOT need to write any addresses.

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Dear John, I hope you are doing well. I am writing to suggest
you
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a speaker for your upcoming event which can help to promote your book library to the population. You could send an invitation to "Joseph
Murrphy
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Murphy
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an
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 author of " The
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 of Subconscious Mind" book. As per his
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suscess
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success
, he is a motivational author and speaker as well, who can provide some useful tips to live
peaceful
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 life. No doubt our society is
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the healthy one among
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 in the city, but there are some cases of anxiety and
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could
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 see
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 in the young generation. Given that ,Joseph might be able to give better direction to them by his
explaination
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explanation
 of the power of our inner instincts.
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, it can
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encourage
 people to explore their own other
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perspectives
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 living life.
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, it can bring the crowd
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 your workshop, which can assist you
finacially
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financially
. As per my reviews, every family has his famous book, which gives me a signal that he would be the best choice. Let me know , if you need any
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assistance
 from me, I would be
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grateful
 to help you. Regards, Garima

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coherence and cohesion
Consider providing a more structured introduction that clearly states your recommendation right at the beginning. This could enhance clarity.
language use
Make sure to carefully proofread your work to avoid small grammatical errors as they can affect clarity. For example, 'as per his books success' could be adjusted to 'due to the success of his books'.
task response
Try to provide a few more specific examples or anecdotes related to the speaker’s impact to bolster your points about their relevance and appeal.
task achievement
You have chosen an interesting speaker and provided a clear rationale for your choice, which shows good task fulfillment.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • guest speaker
  • upcoming event
  • recommend
  • contribute
  • notable achievements
  • publications
  • suitable candidate
  • knowledge
  • expertise
  • storytelling ability
  • add value
  • appeal
  • wider audience
  • relevance
  • unique perspective
  • highlight
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