The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts depict online shopping sales for four sectors (electronic and appliance ,food and beverage, home furnishings , and video games) in Canada between two
years
Use synonyms
(2005 and 2010).
Overall
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, electronic and appliance items had the highest proportion of online shopping sales in 2005.
However
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,
this
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changed after five
years
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,
where
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when
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food and beverage took the first place
instead
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. People bought electronic and appliance products more than any other in 2005, with a percentage of 35%,
Whereas
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it declined to 30% in 2010.
Additionally
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, home furnishings’ proportion decreased by 10% in five
years
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, going from 25% to 15%. Food and beverage online shopping accounted for 22% in 2005.
However
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, it increased in the second year to 32%.
Furthermore
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, buying video games became more common in those five
years
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, which made the proportion of
this
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sector go higher, accounting for 18% in the first year and 23% in the second year.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accounted for
  • notable decrease
  • significant increase
  • steady growth
  • modest increase
  • sharp decline
  • percentage of online sales
  • retail sectors
  • pie charts
  • comparison
  • over the five-year period
  • largest share
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