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Today more and more tourist are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antartic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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The reason for more and more
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tourist
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tourists
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 visiting
places
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 where conditions are difficult
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because
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 these
place
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 are still preserved in
it
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 natural form and are far from
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commercialisation
 for the purpose of
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tourism
. There are multiple advantages to going to
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places
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,
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places
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 are unique in
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 identity, these
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 are closer to nature and maintain
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 authenticity,
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some
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tourist
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tourists
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 do not necessarily like the busy and artificially created
tourist
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places
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,
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 of visiting
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places
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 could
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 in comparison to popular travel destinations. But
tourist
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 activity in
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 difficult locations
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 poses its own
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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 and some could overshadow the benefits,
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 location lack
availability
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the availability
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 of basic infrastructure,
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 as
airport
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airports
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, roads,
hotel
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hotels
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, communication and even medical care, which
some time
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 can make travel way more difficult in
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 locations, being close to nature
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 means
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location
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locations
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 may present
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of
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 extreme and harsh weather conditions, which sometimes can even pose risk to human life. Having said that, with careful planning and selection of time and location for travel in
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 locations can
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 be once in a
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 experience.

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Improve the clarity of your introduction by explicitly stating the benefits and disadvantages of visiting difficult locations.
coherence and cohesion
Consider breaking your essay into clear paragraphs, each focused on either benefits or disadvantages, to enhance logical flow.
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Use more varied vocabulary and sentence structures to make your writing more engaging and readable.
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Add specific examples or anecdotes to support your points, which would strengthen your argument and make it more relatable.
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You effectively identified both benefits and disadvantages of visiting challenging destinations.
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The focus on the uniqueness of such places shows your understanding of the allure of difficult travel experiences.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pristine
  • Unparalleled
  • Thrill-seekers
  • Seasoned travelers
  • Ecosystems
  • Conservation
  • Resilience
  • Adaptability
  • Economic benefits
  • Ecotourism
  • Sustainable tourism
  • Health hazards
  • Extreme weather conditions
  • Emergency services
  • Environmental impact
  • Foot traffic
  • Pollution
  • Disruption
  • Specialized equipment
  • Isolation
  • Amenities
  • Cultural exchanges
  • Remote communities
  • Local traditions
  • Lifestyles
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