In some countries university students live at home with their family while they study, whereas in other countries students attend university in another city. Do you think the benefits of living away from home during university outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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students
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are habituated to
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the
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universities from
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. I strongly believe that
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staying in hostels is
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a better
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way to learn many things than living at
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because
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meeting different kinds
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people
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improves the knowledge about
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students
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who
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at
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hostel
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are more confident and comfortable with any kind of
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comparing
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to young
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who
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at
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.
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,
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know more about the world and
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behaviour when they are with
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of
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same age. To illustrate
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, the scholars who prefer to stay in hostels are well in their academics. The reason is they discuss their studies with other
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at any time in the
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.
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improves the bond between them and academic scores.
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,staying in
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hostel
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not only
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studies better but
also
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, makes the person more responsible about their
parents
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, I am a girl who stays far away from my
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this
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makes
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sometimes
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moreover
, the saddest thing is
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not to meet my
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whenever I want. Despite all of
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,
this
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kind of
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made me stronger.
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to
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,I know the struggle of my
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to provide me
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education.I
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by good
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who
makes
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me study all
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to get good marks in exams. At present,I am good enough to make friends and
building
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connections with other
students
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. To
sumup
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sum up
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, I would
like
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conclude, as far as I am concerned,staying
in
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is
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more
benefial
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beneficial
to the
students
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rather than staying at
home
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. Living in
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hostel
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a hostel
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makes the
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more stronger and they are able to travel and live anywhere in the world after spending their
lifr
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life
hostel
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 for some time.

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task achievement
Try to improve the clarity of your main points and ensure every point is well-developed.
coherence and cohesion
Work on ensuring smoother transitions between your ideas to enhance coherence.
coherence and cohesion
Consider varying your vocabulary and sentence structure to make your writing more engaging.
task achievement
You provide personal experiences, which adds a personal touch to your essay.
task achievement
You present clear reasons for the benefits of living in a hostel, making your arguments more convincing.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • independence
  • self-reliance
  • finance management
  • exposure
  • broaden horizons
  • open-minded
  • adaptability
  • conducive environment
  • isolation
  • homesickness
  • financial burden
  • household duties
  • academic responsibilities
  • personal growth
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