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In many countries, the amount of rubbish produced is increasing, what do you think are the causes of this, and what can be done to solve the problem?

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Introduction
Most
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countries
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country's
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 volume of
rubish
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rubbish
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 produced is
unstopable
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unstoppable
.
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However
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 the root of rising
waste
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 is because of
growing
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a growing
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 population and
products
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product
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 demand by people.In
this
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essay
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essay,
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in
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for
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 resolving these problem
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As the industries
is
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are
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 expanding and the population growth is enlarging the amount of
rubish
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rubbish
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 manufactured is getting bigger as well. These are the
reason
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reasons
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 why
waste
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 on the earth is
unstopable
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unstoppable
unstable
 and in fact the
most
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biggest
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problems
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problem
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 in every country.Another
isues
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issue
issues
 is
due to
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unsufficient
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insufficient
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recycle
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recycling
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station
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stations
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specially
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 in
below standard
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countries
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.The attitude
people
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of people
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also
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contribute
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contributes
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 to the pile of
rubbish
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,
for instance
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 not doing
waste
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 management.
Body paragraph 2
However
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,there are many ways
resolving
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to resolve
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this
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 issue.In affluent
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countries
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countries,
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 through
technology
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technology,
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 they develop
machine
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machines
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 that can used to recycle
there
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their
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waste
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 and turn
into
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it into
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 useful things.In
these
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this way
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way
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 they lessen the increase of
there
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their
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rubbish
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.Aside from that, they manage
there
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their
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 citizens to segregate their
waste
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 from degradable to
non degradable
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.In these
case
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cases
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rubbish
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collector
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collectors
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 effortlessly recycle it.
Body paragraph 3
Nevertheless
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 in
below standard
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countries
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 even though they
havn't
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haven't
hadn't
had
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have
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the
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apply
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high end machines for
recycle
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recycling
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waste
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 they can still manage their
waste
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through
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by
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 using
eco friendly
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 materials like plastic bags
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to paper bags.
In addition
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,
government
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the government
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 imposed punishment for irresponsible
nietizens
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netizens
citizens
 and
provide
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provided
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 assistance to the collector of
rubbish
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.
Conclusion
In conclusion,to keep our world clean and free from
rubbish
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 the government and its people should
unit
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unite
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 to
tacle
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tackle
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this
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these
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issues
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issue
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.

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Language
Make sure to proofread your work for spelling and grammatical errors to present a more polished piece. Words like 'rubbish' and 'issues' are misspelled, which can affect the overall impression of your writing.
Content
Try to expand your paragraphs with more details and explanations to enhance clarity and understanding of your points, as some ideas seem underdeveloped or vague.
Cohesion
Use transitions and linking phrases to connect your ideas more smoothly, which will improve the flow of your essay.
Task Response
You have identified relevant causes and solutions for the problem of increasing rubbish production, which shows good engagement with the topic.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • throwaway culture
  • convenience
  • discard
  • repair
  • reuse
  • excessive packaging
  • consumerism
  • advertising
  • recycling
  • waste management
  • awareness
  • infrastructure
  • policies
  • industrial growth
  • byproducts
  • sustainable practices
  • environmental impact
  • landfill
  • biodegradable
  • composting
  • circular economy
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