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Marketing and promotion is the key to a successful business.To what extent do you agree.

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Advertising has been facilitating sales of
the
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businesses over the years.Which is indeed accurate.
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 marketing helps businesses to introduce
products
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 and services in public, without a
high
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high-quality
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quality
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of
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product
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 it is not possible for any
business
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 to grow in the market for the long term.I personally
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believe
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,
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the
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quality
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 of
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the product
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product
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products
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as important as advertising to be successful in the market . Without a doubt , promotion has been playing a crucial role in the development of businesses over the years. First , it helps to introduce or get familiar
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 new
products
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 with the consumers .Without
ads
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 it may not
possible
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be possible
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 to dominate or replace
existed
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products
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.
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, in
this
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 fast-paced world, even if a new
product
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 is far better than other
existed
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products
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 still mouth-to- mouth or organic promotion may not be enough for the rapid growth of the
business
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.
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, marketing has the potential to increase
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profits of corporations by commercializing discounts during
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occasions and festivals as it
awares
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aware
 and encourages consumers to buy more .
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 ,
while
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 promotion is essential to build a
relation
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relationship
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 with
consumer
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consumers
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,it may only
beneficial
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 if
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product
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the product
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has
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a
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high
quality
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 or
more
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is more
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 reliable than
others
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other products
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product
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.
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, it does not make any sense
spending
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 a substantial amount of money on advertising if the
products
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 do not have
a
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the
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potential to satisfy the customers.
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, if a
high
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high-quality
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quality
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product
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 has
introduced
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been introduced
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 in the marketing once
then
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 reliance on advertising
decreased
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decreases
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, as
customer
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customers
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 buy it frequently which could lead to increasing profits and sales. In conclusion, to introduce the
business
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 in
todays's
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today's
 competitive market, advertising is
necessary
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a necessary
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 tool to expand it.
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, if
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the
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established
product
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 has
potential
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the potential
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 to meet and satisfy customer needs
then
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 dependency on marketing
decreased
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 leading
t
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to
 cost-effective
business
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 .

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea and that supporting sentences reflect this idea.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the variety of linking words and phrases to enhance the flow of ideas between sentences and paragraphs.
task achievement
Clarify your stance more explicitly in the introduction and ensure it is consistent throughout your essay.
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Provide more detailed and specific examples that directly support your arguments.
task achievement
The essay presents a balanced view on the importance of marketing and product quality.
task achievement
You have included relevant points about the role of promotion in business, showing your understanding of the topic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Visibility
  • Market recognition
  • Digital marketing
  • Social media
  • Search Engine Optimization (SEO)
  • Online advertising
  • Consumer behavior
  • Brand loyalty
  • Purchasing decisions
  • Brand identity
  • Ethical concerns
  • Financial burden
  • Innovation
  • Saturated market
  • Customer engagement
  • Traditional vs. modern marketing
  • Market trends
  • Feedback analysis
  • Adaptability
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