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Band 4.5

You rented a car from Car Rental Company. The air conditioner has stopped working. You phoned the company a week ago but it still has not been repaired. Write a letter to the company. In your letter – introduce yourself – explain the situation – say what action you would like the company to take

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Dear Sir/Mam , I Amarpreet Singh, I have booked
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car
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a car
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 from the ABC rental two weeks ago,
Honda
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a Honda
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 Civic 2020 SD of grey
color
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 and my booking no is 2992738 .I am writing
this
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 letter to tell you about
my
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the
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sitatution
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situation
 that I am facing because of your
staff
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staff's
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negelence
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negligence
. Actually ,the
car
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 had no issues for two days after I rented
suddenly
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it suddenly
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 , one day
iI
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I
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 was driving from my office to home and the air
conditionar
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conditioner
 of the
car
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 stopped working.On the next day march 2, 2025 , I called
to
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your service department and they assured me they are going to fix
this
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 within 4 days.
Although
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 It was supposed to be fixed after 4 days , I still went to get my
car
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 on the next day of
due
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 date .
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 , your staff did not repair it .
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, I
ask
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 them
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either repair a
car
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 or give me another one but
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 of giving
a
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care they
behave
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 rudely. It is my
humbel
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humble
 request to you , either please
reapir
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repair
 my
car
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 before tomorrow evening or please return my deposit so that
i
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 can book
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car
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a car
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 from any other agency. Thank you, Sincerely, Amarpreet
singh
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Singh
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.

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Your letter introduces the situation but could be more detailed in explaining the timeline and issues more clearly. Consider providing specific dates and further context about the inconvenience caused.
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Make sure to maintain a consistent and polite tone throughout the letter, especially when requesting assistance or expressing dissatisfaction. Avoid using language that might come off as accusatory or negative.
coherence and cohesion
Try to separate different ideas into distinct paragraphs to enhance clarity. For example, you could have one paragraph for the issue and another for your requests. This will improve overall flow.
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You clearly state your identity and provide the necessary details regarding your rental, which helps establish context.
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The conclusion effectively outlines your expectations, conveying your needs clearly to the company.
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