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In many countries, the amount of rubbish produced is increasing, what do you think are the causes of this, and what can be done to solve the problem?

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It is concerning that some countries have produced a large number of
waste
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 which has risen significantly.
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 essay will outline the reasons behind
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 issue and suggest possible solutions.
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 with ,the high
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 throughout the country is caused by some factors ,one of the main factors is the lack of individual responsibility for protecting their environment, in recent years most people especially young are ignorance about the potential risk
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 weak and non-strict laws.
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 if the government does not follow up on
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 problem would make it worse.
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 to that many industries like the food industry when produce excessive products with no demand , so after the
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 date they will be thrown it which in turn leads to a huge amount of
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 . Regarding solving the problem there are many effective ways to address it.
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 ,one of the most crucial methods is people should be recycling because it contributes significantly to reducing the amount of rubbish.
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 , studies have shown that the country with the least
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 is that country reusing and recycling .
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, it is essential to pay attention
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 people's awareness and
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action to raise
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 awareness by educating them via schools, workplaces, and media. Finley , companies should encourage individuals to use some environmentally friendly products like reusable water bottles.
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, it is true that rubbish is becoming a serious issue that the global community should know about the reasons for as the first step to finding an efficient solution.

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content
The essay addresses the topic clearly and presents a structured approach to the problem and solutions.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • throwaway culture
  • convenience
  • discard
  • repair
  • reuse
  • excessive packaging
  • consumerism
  • advertising
  • recycling
  • waste management
  • awareness
  • infrastructure
  • policies
  • industrial growth
  • byproducts
  • sustainable practices
  • environmental impact
  • landfill
  • biodegradable
  • composting
  • circular economy
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