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Essay topics: An Australian friend is coming to visit you, and it will be his/her birthday during the visit. write a letter to your friend In your letter * say how you feel about the visit * suggest what you could do on his/her birthday *try to find out what you friend thinks of your idea

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Dear Mansour , I hope you doing well, I'm fully happy to
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 you will come to
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visit
vist
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visit
 me next week, I
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really
realy
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really
 miss You and I
remanbered
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remembered
 all
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 things we had
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 the past . Since you told me
you'er comming
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you are coming
 I felt
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happy
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 I'm very excited and we can do a lot of things together.
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, do not believe that I forget your birthday I never forget your birthday my dear friend
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 I know
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restaruant
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restaurant
 near my house we can do the
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 there
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 they have a good cock
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 can do a lot of great food.
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However
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 if you don't
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 go to
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the restaruant
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restaruant
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restaurant
restaurants
 we can do the party
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 my house
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of course
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 , I want to hear from you what you think about my
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. Are we should go to the
restaruant
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restaurant
 or do
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 party
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 my home ? what
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do you
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 think you should do ?
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however
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 if want we can go to
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another place
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 they are many good places . I
hop
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hope
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this
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latter
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letter
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 finds you well and I'm looking forward to hearing from you. Best regards , Hamed

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coherence and cohesion
Pay attention to your sentence structures and grammar. A few grammatical mistakes can confuse the reader.
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Ensure that you fully express your thoughts clearly. Your ideas about the birthday celebration were great but could be elaborated on more.
coherence and cohesion
Check your spelling and punctuation. Small errors in spelling can distract from your message.
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Your enthusiasm about your friend's visit is very clear and warm.
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You provided a good suggestion for celebrating the birthday, showing that you care about your friend.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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