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*IELTS Training By Simiyu Paul_R The graph below gives information on the differences in clothing exports from three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

*IELTS Training By Simiyu Paul_R The graph below gives information on the differences in clothing exports from three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the distinctions in clothing trade from Colombia, Japan and Myanmar
during
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 1999 to 2003. The data is calibrated in millions of
dollars
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.
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, it is evident that Myanmar witnessed the most fluctuations in the business,
while
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 the exports from Colombia and Japan showed less changes. By observing the graph, it can be seen that Myanmar's overseas market of garments began in 1999, increased dramatically and reached more than 900
million
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dollars
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 in 2001, which declined sharply and recorded below 350
million
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dollars
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 in 2002, but again increased to around 400 millions of
dollars
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 in the
last
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 year.
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, the exporting trade of Colombia was 480
millions
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million
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of
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dollars
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 , which slightly soared over the years and rose by 110
million
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dollars
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 in the
last
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 second year. A steady fall was shown in 2003.
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, the international trade of Japan was initiated with 590
million
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dollars
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 in the first year, which fluctuated till 2001 and a decrease was noticed in 2002 and 2003 to 500
million
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dollar
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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