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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart
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 information about the proportion of rented and owned houses accommodation in
to
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two
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 countries from 1950 to 2020 .
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the owned households were increasing gradually through the period given,
however
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,
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household
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households
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 in rented
were
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decreased after starting with
high
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a high
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precentage
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percentage
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According to
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 the data given , in 1950 rent had the highest proportion compared to own houses around 68 per
cent
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 and after that declined gradually until reached 30 per
cent
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than
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rised
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raised
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 own
household
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 32
percent
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per cent
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 and increased steadily and reached a peak in 2000
around
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at around
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 70 per
cent
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.
At the end
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 of the period in
2020
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2020,
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household
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households
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 rented had around 35 per
cent
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,
on the other hand
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,
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household
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households
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 In
owend
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owned
accommodation
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accommodated
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 above 65 per
cent
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 which was double the proportion
with
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apply
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the
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apply
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rented houses .

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Vocabulary: Replace the words household, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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