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The chart below shows the total numbers of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories from 1995 to 2002.

The chart below shows the total numbers of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories from 1995 to 2002.
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The column graph illustrates the total amount of calls kinds from local , national and international
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mobiles in the United
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 over a 7-year period from 1995 to 2002.
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 , the data of calls kind from local consistently accounted for the largest share of total calls time.
In contrast
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 , the figure for mobiles was lowest over the given period
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 the number of minutes of international was
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 increased . An analysis of the chart in detail , it can be seen that during the period from 1995 to 2002 , local
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 73% of total
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 in 1995 , rising to a peak at 90% in 1999 before sharply decreasing to 72% in 2002.
On the other hand
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 , national witnessed a steady go up from 35 % in 1995 to 55% in 2002 .
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 , mobiles
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 jumped quickly seven fold from 5% in 1995 to 35% in 2002

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • telephone calls
  • total number of minutes
  • divided into categories
  • local fixed-line calls
  • national and international calls
  • mobile calls
  • steady rise
  • growing popularity
  • accessibility
  • fluctuations
  • predominant mode of communication
  • progressive increase
  • dramatic increase
  • communication patterns
  • technological changes
  • social changes
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