The graph below gives information on the number of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

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club
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, Martial arts , Amateur dramatics, Table tennis and Musical
perfomances
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performances

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at a city centre in Melbourne , Australia over a 20-year period from 200 to 2020.
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, the figure for citizens taking part in
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the Film

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club was
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unchanged.Meanwhile ,the value of communities encouraged in Martial arts , Amateur dramatics and Table tennis experienced variation over a period. An analysis of the graph in detail,
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Film
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the Film

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club stood at 65 units in 2000
then
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slightly
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to 60 in 2010 before gradually increasing to approximately 66 in 2020.
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, Musical
perfomances
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performances

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bengin
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at 0 in 2000 , remaining the same
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0 until 2005 . Next , the number
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jumped rapidly to 15 in 2020 .From 2000 to 2020 ,Table tennis went up slowly from 17 to 55 .Martial arts witnessed significant
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from 37 in 2000 to 28 in 2020 .
Finanlly
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surged from around 18 in 2000 to 52 in 2020.

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