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GT A friend of yours has recently written to you asking for advice about a problem at work. You have had a similar problem at your workplace in the past. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, tell your friend how you feel about the problem explain how you faced a similar situation in the past suggest possible solutions to the problem

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I hope you are doing well,
i
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was sorry to hear about the challenges you are facing at your
work
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 .I know how frustrating it is as I
encountred
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encountered
same
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 situation two
year
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ago. In my case , I was dealing with a
heavyworkload
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heavy workload
 and unrealistic deadlines. It made me feel overwhelmed and
stressedout
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stressed out
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i
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 found a prudent way to solve
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 problem , I approached my supervisor and
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a
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open conversation about giving me manageable deadlines and asked to remove some unnecessary workload from my
sechdule
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schedule
.I
also
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 suggested
him
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to
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mark the
urgency
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work
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 so that I can prioritize
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them In your situation,
i
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 would suggest you
to
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have an honest conversation about your
overwhelmed
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work
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 with your manager and ask him to provide
for
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a helping hand .I would
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 advise you to
breakdown
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break down
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 your
work
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in
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 smaller parts in
this
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 way it may feel less burden. I hope
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 suggestion
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 help you and please take care of yourself. Thank you , Best regard, Amar.

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task achievement
Consider ensuring there are fewer grammatical errors and typos. For example, 'encountred' should be 'encountered' and 'heavyworkload' should be 'heavy workload'.
coherence and cohesion
Try to vary your vocabulary and sentence structure to make the letter more engaging. This can help improve the overall tone and fluency.
task achievement
You effectively addressed your friend's situation by sharing your own experience, which helps provide a personal touch to the advice.
coherence and cohesion
The structure of your letter is clear, with distinct sections for expressing feelings, explaining your past experience, and suggesting solutions.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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