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Writing Samples
Band 3

With the vast increase in online resources, libraries with print books are not a necessity for today's society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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last
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the last
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 decade, as the use of online platforms has increased people started to depend on them more. Few individuals believe with the increment of those resources
reader
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readers
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 started to prefer online
books
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instead
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 of physical
books
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. I strongly agree with
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 statement, people
has
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diverte
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diverse
diverted
 themselves from using print
books
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 to
ebook
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ebooks
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. On the one hand,
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the reader
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reader
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reader's
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 biggest problem is
storage
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the storage
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 of novels. As the hard copies require space as well they make
difficult
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it difficult
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 to carry them around.meanwhile, electronic
books
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 are usually on our phones or special reading gadgets like
kindle
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Kindle
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. Which does not face issues with capacity and it is easy to use them whenever a person
want
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 them to use.
Furthermore
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,
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a
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hard
copy
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copies
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 of
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the book
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book
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books
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 are more expensive compared to online
one
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ones
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,
leads
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leading
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 to unaffordable
price
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prices
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 for some users.
While
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 the ebooks provide large
discount
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discounts
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 on it
specially
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 on
kindle
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Kindle
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 which
make
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makes
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 it budget friendly for
individual
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individuals
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.
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, those who
has
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have
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habit
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a habit
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to keep
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of keeping
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books
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 which they read as memories, they still choose hard copying.
Also
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, few of the
books
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 are autographed by
there
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their
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 author and people like to keep them as it is connected to their emotions. In conclusion, as
the
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a
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 book lover
myself
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myself,
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 I would rather have ebooks than physical
books
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 as it is convenient as well
affordable
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as affordable
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.

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grammar
Ensure to use proper article usage, e.g., 'the last decade' instead of 'last decade'.
grammar
Pay attention to subject-verb agreement, e.g., 'people have diverged' instead of 'people has diverte'.
coherence
Make sure to form clearer topic sentences and transitions to improve the logical flow between paragraphs.
task achievement
Try to provide more specific examples to support your arguments, such as mentioning specific ebooks or digital platforms.
task achievement
You presented a clear opinion on the topic, which is essential for task achievement.
coherence
Your introduction outlines the main points effectively, indicating a good structure.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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