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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the samepark today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two current maps illustrate the prior plan of Grange
Park
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 in 1920 and how it has changed up until now. At first glance, the layout has completely changed and the
park
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 has been more equipped and children-friendly. The number of rose gardens have been declined and the green area is occupied by more structures. The two entrance doors have still remained in the same locations.
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, a new underground entrance has been designated on the right bottom of the map. The central fountain in the
park
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 has been replaced by a rose garden surrounded by several seats which used to be all around the
park
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. On the left side of the map, the prior stage for musicians has been swapped with a spacious Amphitheatre for concerts. On the opposite side, the pond for water plants has been allocated to the children's play area.
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, a new spectacular water feature has taken the place of the previous glasshouse.

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introduction conclusion present
Consider providing a brief conclusion summarizing the main transformations in the park. This can help give a clearer overall picture and enhance the structure of your response.
logical structure
Clarify relationships between the features you describe. For example, mention how the changes may affect visitors’ experiences. This will enhance your logical structure and add depth to your analysis.
supported main points
You successfully identified and compared key changes in the park, showcasing a good understanding of the differences between the two maps.

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