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Some people think it's better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Other people believe it's good to have friends who some times disagree with them. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is thought by some people that it is better to choose
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 who always stick
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 the same opinions as them,
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 others believe that it is good to have
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some times
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 disagree with them. In my opinion, having
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 disagree in certain situations might bring more benefits. On the one hand, having
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 often agree on the same opinion might lead to failure, whether it is in a school project or a work project. For many students especially, having a friend that agrees with everything you say might bring you down because you're frequently making the same mistakes without knowing what is right and what is wrong.
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 may be exceptional for students who are able to spot their own mistakes and make improvements.
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 reason, I believe that there are obvious downsides
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 always has the same opinions as us.
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 who sometimes disagree with us will undoubtedly benefit us in terms of receiving honest opinions or learning from repeated mistakes. By incorporating
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, we would be able to think out of the box to widen our thinking and visions of the future.
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, having
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 with different points of view would create variations, leading to success in the future.
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 reason, I believe that having
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 with different ways of thinking would aid understanding among young generations these days. In conclusion, we should be smart enough to choose our
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 to sustain a better life in the future.

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language
Make sure to consistently use formal language and avoid phrases like 'bring you down' which can detract from the formality of your essay.
content
Include more specific examples to illustrate your points. For instance, when discussing the benefits of having friends who disagree, referencing a real-life scenario or a specific situation could strengthen your argument.
style
Consider varying your sentence structure more to enhance readability and engagement. Using a mix of complex and simple sentences can create a more dynamic flow.
content
Your introduction clearly presents the topic and outlines the two differing opinions well, setting a good foundation for your essay.
structure
The conclusion succinctly summarizes your perspective effectively, reinforcing your main argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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