You have just rented an unfurnished flat and a friend has told you that the opportunity shop is the shopping centre has cheap secondhand furniture. Write to the shop, owner, describing what you need and asking whether they have this items and what they cost.

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Dear Sir, My name is Shiv. I am writing
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letter to inform you that recently I rented a flat, which has no furniture. I heard
alot
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a lot
about your shop from my friend. So, I am willing to buy some secondhand furniture from your store.
Firstly
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, I need
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a dinning
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dinning
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dining
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table with four chairs and
study
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a study
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table. Not only
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, I need a bed and lamp for my room. Despite
of
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this
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, I need a closet for my clothes. These are products, which I need. So please inform me if you have these items. Apart
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from
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this
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, you can suggest
me
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apply
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some better options. I am moving
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place from 25th March in the evening time. So I need
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stuff as soon as possible.
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my normal life. Do please provide me
list
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a list
the list
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of
product's
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the product's
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price
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prices
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? So, I can prepare my budget.
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, please provide me
picture
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a picture
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of every item. Through
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everything
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everything,
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I can check on
personal
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a personal
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level. Hoping for
the
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a
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positive response from your side. Yours Faithfully, Shiv

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coherence
Consider structure of your ideas. For example, it could help to separate the furniture needs into different paragraphs to improve readability.
task achievement
It's good to use polite language throughout your letter, but ensure to minimize informal phrases such as 'a lot' to maintain a professional tone.
task achievement
Your request for specific items was clear and the overall purpose of the letter was communicated effectively.
coherence
You've included a friendly closing that encourages a positive response, which is a nice touch.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • unfurnished flat
  • secondhand furniture
  • opportunity shop
  • availability
  • items
  • cost
  • budget
  • condition
  • warranty
  • return policy
  • sale
  • discount
  • contact details
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