The graph below shows the average monthly salary and the prices of black and white and colour TV in Japanese yen from 1953 to 1973.

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The line graph illustrates the average monthly income and the prices of both black and white television and colored televisions in Japanese currency, in a 20-year period, between 1953 to 1973.

Overall

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it is clear that

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the monthly salary in Japan shows an upward trend throughout the period,

while

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the

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and black and white televisions face a decline in prices. In 1953, the monthly income in Japan was at its lowest at approximately 30

yen

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However

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, the figure began to increase significantly through the given timeline, reaching a peak of 180

yen

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by 1973.

On the other hand

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, black and white

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's price was expensive for the average monthly income, which cost 100

yen

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in 1953;

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, the

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faced a drop in price till 1968. After

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, the cost of buying a

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remained stable for the

last

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5 years.

Moreover

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, the

colored

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price was at its highest by 180

yen

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in 1958;

then

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, the figure fell dramatically in the following 5 years. Afterwards, the figure declined slightly till the end of the period about 90

yen

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Vocabulary: Replace the words yen, tv with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

181 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Average monthly salary
Black and white TV
Colour TV
Japanese Yen
Affordability
Upward/downward trend
Technological advancements
Consumer preferences
Price dynamics
Market changes
Increase/decrease
Ratio
Introduction
Compare/contrast

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The graph below shows the average monthly salary and the prices of black and white and colour TV in Japanese yen from 1953 to 1973.

Some people think that it would be better for large companies and industries to move to regional areas outside large urban centres. Do you think the advantage outweigh the disadvantages?

You have recently moved to a different location where you experience frequent electricity breakdown. Write a letter to the electricity board. In your letter, -describe the situation, -tell what problems you are facing due to this, -explain what you want the board to do

Some people think that if a country is already rich, further economic development will not result in its citizens being any happier. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development?