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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the Unitedv Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the Unitedv Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph line illustrates the average
carbon
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dioxide
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emissions
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 per
individuals
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individual
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 in four countries ( the United Kingdom,Sweden, Italy and Portugal, from 1967 to 2007.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
Uk
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UK
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 individuals were the highest producer of
carbon
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dioxide
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 compared to
others
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other
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 countries.
Moreover
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, Italy and Portugal
shows
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show
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 an upward trend,
while
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UK
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the UK
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 and Sweden face a downward trend
in
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apply
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throughout the period. In 1967,the United
kingdom's
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Kingdom's
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 average
emissions
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 of
carbon
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dioxide
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 per person were at
its
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their
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 peak by
appromximately
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approximately
 11
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tones
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tonnes
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,
then
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 the number started to
declined
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decline
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 gradually until it reached nearly 9
tone
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tonnes
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 by the end of the period. Meanwhile, Sweden began at 8
tones
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,
then
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rised
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rose
rise
raised
 rapidly till 1977, After which, faced a significant drop in
number
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the number
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 for the following 30 years.
On the other hand
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, Italy and Portugal show
similar
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a similar
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 trend, their average
emissions
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 of
carbon
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dioxide
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 were below 5
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tones
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tonnes
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in
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at
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 the beginning of the period.
In contrast
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, both
countirs
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countries
emissions
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 increased dramatically, reaching
an
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apply
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approximately 8 and 6
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tones
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tonnes
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 respectively by 2007.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, dioxide, emissions, tones with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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