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The chart and table below give information about healthcare resources and life expectancy in different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and table below give information about healthcare resources and life expectancy in different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart and table show healthcare in
countries
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different countries
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. It has hospital
beds
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 per thousand
people
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 and spending by
government
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the government
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. It
also
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show
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shows
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life
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 expectancy.
Overall
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,
Japan
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have
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has
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 more hospital
beds
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 but
spend
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spends
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 less
money
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.
US
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The US
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 spend a lot but
life
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 expectancy is low. So more
money
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 does not always mean
people
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 live long.
Japan
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 have
most
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the most
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 hospital
beds
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, 14 per thousand. Netherlands and Australia have 4.5 and 4. Other countries like Canada, Germany, Spain,
UK
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the UK
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, and
US
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the US
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 have less than 4
beds
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. But, more
money
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 spent does not mean
longer
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a longer
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life
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.
US
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The US
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 spend
most
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the most
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, $6,719 per person, but
have
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has
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lowest
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the lowest
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life
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, 78 years.
Japan
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 is different. It
have
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has
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 most hospital
beds
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 but
not
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does not
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spend
Verb problem
cost
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 much, only $2,581 per person.
Netherlands
Correct article usage
The Netherlands
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 spend more and
US
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the US
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 the most, but
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Japan
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Japanese
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people
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 live
longest
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the longest
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 (83 years). So, maybe other
thing
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things
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 like food and lifestyle make
people
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 live
long
Rephrase
longer
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, not just
hospital
Fix the agreement mistake
hospitals
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 or
money
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words beds, people, life, japan, money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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