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The chart shows the information relating to people within 15 minute drive service in a particular region in the UK. It also compares the people living in urban areas and people living in rural areas. write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given below.

The chart shows the information relating to people within 15 minute drive service in a particular region in the UK. It also compares the people living in urban areas and people living in rural areas. write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given below.
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A glance at the bar chart given illustrates the information regarding
citizens
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 within 15 minute
drive
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 services in a specific region in
UK
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the UK
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.
Moroever
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However
, the bar
also
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 compares
citizens
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 who live in the urban
areas
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 and rural
areas
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. From all perspectives, it can be seen that
citizens
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 who live in urban
areas
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 attain the highest
percentage
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to do
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of doing
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15 minute
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15-minute
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drive
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 service,
while
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 people who live in rural spots obtain the
least
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lowest
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percentage
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, especially for those who
works
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work
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 in primary
school
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. From an initial figure,
citizens
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 who live in urban
areas
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 get
highest
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the highest
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percentage
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to do
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of doing
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drive
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driving
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 service within 15 minutes. They
are working
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work
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 as
doctor
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a doctor
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, post
office's
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office
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 staff, and
teacher
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teachers
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 in primary and secondary
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school
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schools
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. Their percentages reach
to
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apply
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100% of
citizens
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.
Subsequently
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,
citizens
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 who live in rural spots that do
15 minute
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15-minute
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drive
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 service have different percentages based on their jobs.
Doctor
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Doctors
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 and
teacher
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teachers
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 in secondary
school
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 attain the first spot, which is 100%. The second place is staff in
post
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the post
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 office with around 95%.
Furthermore
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,
mentor
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mentors
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 in primary
school
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 get the
least
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lowest
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percentage
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, which is 60%.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words citizens, drive, areas, percentage, school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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