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Some argue that teachers should focus on academics more than motivating students

There is a view that
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teaching
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academic
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 way is more significant than motivating
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 some say that it has a negative effect on the pupils with teaching academic methods. On the one hand, Academic learning involves various methods and approaches
students
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 use to understand and retain information, often categorized into learning styles like visual, auditory, kinesthetic, and reading/writing.
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, learning styles, Learners who prefer to learn by seeing,
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 as through diagrams, charts, and visual aids
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, Auditory, Learners who prefer to learn by hearing,
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 as through lectures, discussions, and listening to recordings. Beginning with Evidence of effective academic teaching can include
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 feedback, peer observations, self-reflection, improvements in teaching practice, observable
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, and practice informed by research, all of which can be compiled in a teaching portfolio. Academic
motivation
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 refers to the internal drive and desire a
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 has to engage in and succeed in their studies,
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motivation
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 in general is the force that propels individuals to act and achieve goals. 
Motivation
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 plays a crucial role in academic success, and effective teaching strategies can foster and sustain it, leading to improved
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 engagement and learning
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.
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, the disadvantages of focusing on
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 the vast majority of educators agree that
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motivation
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 is crucial for effective teaching and learning, a potential disagreement point lies in the methods used to foster
motivation
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, with some
favoring
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 extrinsic rewards and others prioritizing intrinsic engagement.
Motivation
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 is crucial in teaching and learning, with evidence suggesting that motivated
students
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 and teachers lead to better academic
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,
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 demotivation can negatively impact learning and teaching quality. Teaching with
motivation
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 involves fostering a passion for learning in
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,
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 academic teaching focuses on the delivery of knowledge and skills to achieve specific learning
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. 
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 a teacher's
motivation
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 and teaching style can influence
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motivation
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 and academic performance, research suggests that disagreements about teaching and
motivation
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 can be complex and multifaceted, with various factors playing a role. In conclusion, period of time there are many pluses of no
motivation
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, I consider honest
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teaching educational way
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significant
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 effective.

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task achievement
Ensure that your essay clearly addresses both sides of the argument, providing balanced viewpoints with specific examples and explanations.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the clarity and logical flow of your arguments. Try using clearer topic sentences and transitions between ideas to guide the reader more effectively.
coherence and cohesion
Revisit grammar and punctuation throughout the essay to reduce errors that can confuse the reader and detract from your message.
task achievement
You present a relevant topic and attempt to cover both perspectives, showing an awareness of the complexities in the argument.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic performance
  • motivational strategies
  • foundational understanding
  • engagement
  • dynamic learning environment
  • well-rounded students
  • long-term benefits
  • personal drive
  • educational experience
  • emotional support
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