Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answers

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An opinion stating that performing physical
activities
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or
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in which children are interested helps in better skill development rather than using old traditional
methods
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of learning. I completely agree with the statement that interesting
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motivate learning in children.
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with, playful
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of learning
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as rhyming,
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the use
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of
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, audiovisual aids and so on increases
child's
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a child's
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interest in learning. For
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instance, if a chemistry experiment is performed in a laboratory it will engage
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pupils'
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interest and will leave a deeper mark on their memories rather than just reading it from books.
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, in junior
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if simple lessons
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as learning different shapes, colours
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etcetra are taught with
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the help
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of board games and playful
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toddlers will catch and memorise easily. To
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exemplify
, in kindergarten blocks, colours and other attractive materials are used to make learning an enjoyable experience. It
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helps to develop
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and
build their
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interest
in education.
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,
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strongly agree with the statement that to make learning more effective and interesting different
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which build interest
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learning should be
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adopted
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rather than using old traditional
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Try to strengthen your introduction by providing a clearer context for the argument. You may want to briefly outline why enjoyable activities are preferred over traditional methods.
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Make sure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that introduces the main idea to help guide the reader through your argument.
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Consider using more varied vocabulary and complex sentence structures to enhance your writing style and make your argument more persuasive.
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You have included relevant examples to support your arguments, which is a strong point in your essay.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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