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Language teacher should concentrate only on giving positive feedback when students do good work rather than on criticizing their bad work. To what extent you agree or disagree?

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There is no denying the fact that students are influenced by their teachers' feedback. Some may argue that tutors, especially those who
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encouraging feedback for the student's excellence rather than focusing on their bad work. I believe that positive words have a greater impact on students' performance which ultimately will enhance their work. On one hand, students'
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 is highly dependent on their
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 positive need to be appreciated for the great effort
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • constructive criticism
  • positive reinforcement
  • self-esteem
  • misconceptions
  • engagement
  • productive learning environment
  • holistic educational experience
  • feedback
  • motivation
  • celebrate successes
  • guidance
  • clarify errors
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