The pie chart below show the revenue from 5 industries in Togo in 2000 and projections for 2050. SUmmarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below show the revenue from 5 industries in Togo in 2000 and projections for 2050. SUmmarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie chart below show the revenue from 5 industries in Togo in 2000 and projections for 2050. SUmmarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie graph compares the profits from five different industries in Togo between the years 2000 and 2050.
Overall
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, the proportions were divided approximately equally in 2000 ,
however
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, after 50 years , more than half of the chart will made up of the semiconductor industry.
Additionally
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, profits from other sections have not changed significantly. In 2000 , soft drinks and data services were leaders by making a profit , with 25
billion
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income. After 50 years , revenue from soft drinks does not change, but , information services income fell to 10
billion
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. Personal insurance revenue
also
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dropped slightly , from 12 to 10 dollars, by 2050.
The industries
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Industries
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like semiconductors showed a surge and heated the point of 126
billion
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dollars , which was more than all of the other combined sectors together. Another industry that had a boost over the period
is
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was
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real estate development , which profit increased from 20 to 25
billion
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by that time.
Also
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, the total income of all industries will double and reach 196
billion
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dollars in 2050.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words billion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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