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The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The data illustrates the information about cell phone and land-line expenditure over a 10-year period from 2001 to 2010. From an
overall
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 perspective, mobile phones saw an upward trend
while
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 national fixed-line declined.
However
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, International fixed-line
services
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 remained steady throughout, except for minor fluctuations at the beginning. Looking at the details, national landline
services
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 stood at around $700 in 2001, making it the most popular method of communicating,
then
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 declined steadily to reach the lowest point of around $400 in 2010. A contrastive trend
recorded
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 in cell phone
services
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 during the period, which rose to a little above $700 in 2010 from the 2001 figure of $200. The international fixed-line
services
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 started at around $250 and
then
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 rose to a figure a little above $300 in 2003, which fell back to $200 and remained the same till 2010. Mobile phones became the most popular service from the least during the
10 year
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 period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words services with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • subscriptions
  • mobile phone lines
  • fixed phone lines
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • stagnation
  • growth
  • decline
  • comparison
  • country
  • statistics
  • data
  • features
  • highlight
  • overall trend
  • pronounced difference
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